Well, maybe not love, but, as a writer, one of your goals should be to get your reader to develop empathy toward your main character. You want your reader to really care what happens to him. If he/she is threatened, you want your reader to feel a bit of anger at the one who did it. By the same token, you might want your reader to dislike or even hate the bad guy.
In both cases you must give your reader reasons to like the hero and dislike the villain. Simply telling the reader these characters are good or bad lacks any emotional impact.
When the Going Gets Tough, the Sentences Get Shorter
During an action sequence, this would be a big mistake: “As we came around the corner of the damp and poorly-lit dungeon, the thousand-pound, yellow and sickly green Thoraxy, with its huge eye and giant, pink bunny ears, took a solid stand, which seemed to indicate, to me at least, that it wasn’t going to let us pass no matter what we could do.”
Not very exciting, was it? Why? There are far too many words here. Description is important, but a large helping of description during an action sequence completely kills the mood of excitement you are trying to create. Incidentally, try not to use very long sentences anyway. It doesn’t impress anyone except retired English professors. You should use sentences no longer than eight or nine words during an action sequence. No one pontificates when they’re in a battle and lives.
Excerpted from the Kindle Book “Creative Writing Essentials” by me (L. Stewart Hearl)
For those who are 55 or older and live in Harris County, Texas, I give a one hour lecture based on the aforementioned book at Glazier Senior Education Center (16600 Pine Forest Lane). In addition to my class, there are literally hundreds of other classes given there on subjects related to health, gardening, hobbies, etc. and all classes are free. My next class will be on February 28th at 1 PM.
Here’s a link: http://www.pct3.com/senior-centers/glazier-senior-center/